On Sunday, March 24, 2013 2:43:46 PM UTC+1, Jeremy Ruston wrote: > My intention was to target ordinary web users who may be interested in > exploring TiddlyWiki, and the purpose is to encourage them to try it out. >
Yup, agree with the compliments here; nice clip and TW5 looks beautiful! Given that ... * you ask for feedback on the clip * your stated target group is web users who are not familiar with TW and that the purpose is to encourage them to try it out * and that the clip is intended as a standalone intro to tw5 from its creator (ie. there won't be many more such intros from you) ...here's my feedback: I agree with your own reflections that the clip should be shorter/snappier. TW is such an amazing and general tool that it is a difficult to "see the light" right away - so in order to *hook *people I believe it would make sense to *highlight some benefits* with TW already at the start of the clip. I would suggest you insert a screen with a bullet list of concrete examples and benefits for the above stated target group. Perhaps some of the application examples listed on tw.com? A glance at what, say, Evernote, Basecamp and other services mention as their benefits could perhaps give a sense of what people need/appreciate. Second, the clip, nice and friendly as it is, is of course also very amateurish and it does not reflect how mature or sophisticated TW is. Someone new could mistake it for merely a (very) neat hack. Now, we know they're totally wrong... but they don't. I believe an introductory clip for something like this must convey *credibility.* How would they otherwise know how great it is? Maybe you can mention that we're X thousand members in the tw group. TW has been developed for Y years. Z thousand copies of the earlier versions of TW have been downloaded. They must know they will not waste their time with something that is abandoned in 6 months. Chest beating is not only deserved but also *necessary *to convince many (most?) people. Also, if it is possible to use on tablets and/or smartphones, then please show this in the clip. A quick flash of a tablet in the first one or two minutes. I notice the link below the clip (good!) but I suggest a* call for action *at the end of the video too, ie. to go to the website and download it. Maybe it's possible, like on youtube, to put a physical url on the clip for clicking. Ok, hope this is of use to make people try TW5. <:-) -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "TiddlyWiki" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to tiddlywiki+unsubscr...@googlegroups.com. To post to this group, send email to tiddlywiki@googlegroups.com. Visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/tiddlywiki?hl=en. For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/groups/opt_out.
