Ok. That looks better, but you now have a small repetition "through the WIAB through WIAB" which you will want to edit down to just"through the WIAB".
Also,"that development progress" -> "that the development progress". As for donations, I would suggest just putting a little note next to the donate button, with something along the lines of "If you don't wish to be named, please just send me a note using the details below" In the donations history section, it would be nice to have a $ (or whichever currency you wish to work in) sign when when you list the donations. On 17 January 2012 18:37, Kirill Kostyuchenko <[email protected]> wrote: > Hello Ali! > > Thanks you for your work. > > I fixed my errors and ask you to suggest the right english phrase about > anonymous / not anonymous donation. > I mean to add some words, that please write me a message with donation, if > you want I show your name in the history right way. > > 2012/1/17 Ali Lown <[email protected]> > >> Just a few nits from the fundwiab copy (grammar/spelling changes) in >> order through the page: >> "In the early December 2011 I'd looked though WIAB" -> "In early >> December I looked through the WIAB" >> "to get fully functional" -> "to get a fully functional" >> "till 1 February" -> "by 1 February" >> "why did Google specify" -> "why Google specified" >> "I kindly ask" -> "I kindly asked" >> "I had hired" -> "I hired" >> "as Google Wave replacement" -> "as a Google Wave replacement" >> "to get usable WIAB" -> "to have a usable WIAB" >> "to get working" -> "to get a working" >> "All donation" -> "All donations" >> "will be spent only to WIAB development" -> "will be used only for >> WIAB development" >> "into main tree" -> "into the main tree" >> "publish total collected" -> "publish the total collected" >> "all spents" -> "all expenditures" >> "If we could" -> "If we can" >> "I'll try to agree with most active WIAB committers" -> "I'll try to >> allow most active WIAB committers" >> >> In the donations history "Decemember" -> "December" >> >> This will give the page a better feel to a native English reader. >> >> Also, not everybody who donates will necessarily want their name >> listed in the donations history rather than just 'anonymous'. >> >> On 17 January 2012 17:36, Kirill Kostyuchenko <[email protected]> wrote: >> > Please apply attached patch to the main index.html. >> > >> > I added links to WaveImport utility and http://fundwiab.com site. >>
