Nice clean easy to navigate site.
I'd move "About us" up to position two on the
menu list - it's the first thing people might
want to know having found the site! I personally
always put contact us last - on the grounds that
the rest of the options should answer questions
and only if that is not the case might one wish to contact the company.
Can I suggest a very careful proof read of the
site? I didn't read it all - but there is at
least one place where East Main st is shown with
lower-case S for Street. Also in a number of
places the wording is a bit cumbersome -
including the same word such as physical several
times in one sentence, never mind in one
paragraph, which doesn't make for easy reading!
Some of the "Wellness" (I don't know that word!!
LOL) tips are bizarre! Are they saying that if we
wear a helmet all the time we're going to be
healthier and avoid Parkinson's? That's how it
reads to me and I doubt the British Medical
Association would endorse THAT claim!!! (Nor the
American equivalent come to that!!)
It is never too late to start exercising - typo in the text
Stretching and flexibility - so why not give examples of what to do?
I'd also seriously question the claim under
Housework - my wife has been a specialist cancer
care nurse for twenty-five years and teaches
others. Her reaction to that claim was "Complete fairy-tale".
For all of his claims he should have very clearly
set out the evidence for the claim or he could
find himself in trouble with people suing because
"You said if I did housework I wouldn't get
cancer" "Your said if I wore a helmet I wouldn't
get Parkinson's" and so on - especially in USA
where you sue each other at the drop of a hat!
Green tea may be just what you need if you skin is ..... (typo)
In a study, people who engaged in more amusing
activities and higher blood levels of cells (typo)
(Sorry - I know you probably didn't write the
text, but I'm pedantic about correct use of
English and structuring of sentences etc. I know
we are two nations bound etc etc. .... but
customer friendliness is paramount I'm sure!)
Those are the ones I've spotted which lead me to
believe there are probably more buried in the longer stretches of text.
Cheers
Peter MacGregor
At 05:21 27/10/2006, you wrote:
Hi all,
I would appreciate it if someone could look over
my new site and give me feedback? The url is http://www.1stchoicept.us.
TIA,
Riva
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