If you want clarity and brevity, "...give it to us at the booth" is a good
compromise, I think.
On January 7, 2016 4:45:42 AM GMT+01:00, Aaron Wolf <aa...@snowdrift.coop>
wrote:
>Thanks Michael!
>
>I think your wording is improved, but maybe "…one of us at the booth"
>just for clarity?
>
>Otherwise, I think it's good to go, but just needs to update the screen
>shots to match whatever we have at the time we print in about two
>weeks.
>
>On 01/06/2016 03:50 PM, Michael Siepmann wrote:
>> On 01/05/2016 02:09 PM, Aaron Wolf wrote:
>>> <snip>
>>> Looking over the screen-shots already, and in light of discussion
>about
>>> metaphors, I propose we clean up the wording (which wasn't carefully
>>> thought through yet) first.
>>>
>>> * how about "Join us!" instead of "Join us in setting…" ?
>>> * maybe for now we drop the "Let's clear the path…" line? (although
>I
>>> like the clear-the-path for the metaphor, I don't like the rest of
>that
>>> line)
>>> * I was emphasizing this more before, but I'm going to push for it a
>>> little more strongly now: I think we should use the term "public
>goods"
>>> in our introductory context (and thus the term will be there for
>people
>>> to provide feedback about). It's the best, most accurate term, and
>the
>>> question is whether it comes across clearly, hence feedback forms
>like this…
>> I agree about "public goods". (I think this discussion fits better
>in
>> the other thread ("4 issues priority") so I'll reply there soon.)
>>> <snip>
>>> Two minor notes:
>>>
>>> * I don't really like the title case on the tent
>> I've changed it to sentence case.
>>> * The "Now please discuss" sounds a bit too strongly imperative,
>like it
>>> isn't optional, you must now do this, even with the please. Not sure
>how
>>> to improve, maybe just put underneath the "optional" heading or have
>>> another "optional" marker?
>> I see your point but I don't want it under "Optional". It's really
>> supposed to be an integral part of the feedback process whenever
>> possible, though I certainly don't want people to feel pressured to
>stay
>> and chat if they don't want to. How about this?:
>>
>> *Thank you!* Now please give this to one of us. If possible, we'd
>> love to discuss it with you to make sure we fully understand your
>> feedback and answer all your questions.
>>
>>> <snip>
>> I'll get the fonts installed on my computer.
>>
>>> Overall, I think this will be really helpful, great work, thanks!
>> Glad you think so - you're welcome!
>>
>> Best,
>>
>> Michael
>>
>>
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