Hi Michelle,

Excellent work.  Here are some detailed comments.  They are included in order 
of going through the document...not in priority order.  I know you only wanted 
feedback on the technical content at this point, but since I am not technical, 
I am not comfortable commenting on the technical content, so, I will focus more 
on flow, consistency and such.  

Hope they are helpful,
T

Preparing to Install and Configure....

- There are a couple of typos in the first paragraph.
- Right above the first note, where you mention what folks can do if they do 
not have a DVD drive, maybe you could mention that the materials will be 
provided on a CD ISO image as well.  Also mention that they can get the LiveCDs 
at the respective websites.
- For the first bullet under pre-requisites, I'd suggest changing the order and 
start with the LiveCD.  While the user will need to go to the internet 
periodically, we'd like to keep that to a minimum.
- <i install> and <i learn> should have the brackets around them
- First bullet under the "Two Methods to install"...I think you need a link.

Backing up the Disk Drive

- can't see the graphic?

Re-partitioning the Disk Drive

- can't see the graphic?
- #7 - what if it doesn't match?  Is this a possibility?
- #9 - is there a recommended size for a Nexenta installation?  Do you think we 
should mention it?  Any of the other distros?

Installing the OpenSolaris software

- chapter headings should be consistent
- <i install>
- can't see graphic

Configuring the OpenSolaris software

- chapter heading
- incomplete sentence right under Configuring Xorg for NVIDIA on Solaris heading
- sentence repeated between 5 and 6 in same section

- typo in #3 of To Configure Screen Resolution of New NVIDIA driver
- sentence repeated between 5 and 6 in same section

Configuring Networking
- describes, not describe in first sentence
- tab will be Resources, not Online Resources - can it link directly there?
 
 
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