Sounds good to me. I like the idea of introducing the bad guy while he is doing something unpalatable. I helped a friend edit his book and I think it worked out well.
Nick A On Jan 29, 2012 10:31 AM, "Nat Russo" <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi Ray, > > Have you ever come across a scene on revision that you were so unhappy > with you just completely rewrote it? > > This happened to me while I was writing yesterday. I re-read the scene > that introduces my antagonist and decided it just wasn't working. So now > I'm sitting here making a bullet-point list of everything I need to > accomplish in the scene and I'm going to have another go at it. > > The original scene was a whole lot of sitting and thinking. I wanted the > reader to get into the head of my "bad guy" to see how he justified his own > perspective on things, but I think I overdid it. I'm going to try it again > by moving some of my other characters into the scene and adding a bit of > conflict. I'll still internalize him a bit, but it may be less "boring" if > there's some actual action taking place. > > Nat > > -- > Sent from my Crappy Laptop (tm) using a poor excuse for a web browser. > >
