My opinion... I'd drop the "man in the door image". The cut off human
and very little detail to show what I can assume is the final step in
the process as you depicted it, storage, just don't do it for me.
I'd then move the last image into position #3. Doesn't seem to fit as
a last image, but the pointing hand adds another action to the series.
I know he's at the dying vats, but that is not that apparent. If the
red stain on the middle foreground vat bothers, you could position it
later in the count, but before the other dying vat images.
Then as suggested, the yellow image becomes the final one.
Hope that helps in some way...
Joseph McAllister
Pentaxian
On Oct 15, 2008, at 21:02 , Stan Halpin wrote:
Not sure I understand the criteria for success in this context, but
among these 9 images, I think the "strongest" and the one I would
end a mini-show with is #7. The bright yellow is a nice exclamation
point behind what has been mostly muted colors.
stan
On Oct 15, 2008, at 5:41 PM, David J Brooks wrote:
Very nice Bob.
As Frank said, i don't envy the thought of editing those to 8-9
photos.
Dave
On Sun, Oct 12, 2008 at 7:01 AM, Bob W <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
A couple of days ago I posted a first edit of the tanneries in Fez:
http://www.web-options.com/Tanneries/
For the ARPS submission I need an essay of exactly 15 pictures. I
have
decided that I will probably make 2 mini-essays, presented as a
slideshow, one of which will be about the tanneries - 6-8 pictures.
Here is my 2nd edit of the tanneries section, done as a Flash
gallery
so you can see approximately how the slideshow will work:
http://www.web-options.com/RPSTanneries/
I'd welcome your thoughts about the content, sequencing and so on.
It
will need to lose some pictures, but I will take part in an RPS
workshop later this month where I will discuss what is strongest -
your views are important to me though (I sound like a call centre!).
My main feeling about this one is that it really needs a stronger
clincher to close the set.
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