On Oct 12, 2008, at 7:01 AM, Bob W wrote:
A couple of days ago I posted a first edit of the tanneries in Fez:
http://www.web-options.com/Tanneries/
For the ARPS submission I need an essay of exactly 15 pictures. I have
decided that I will probably make 2 mini-essays, presented as a
slideshow, one of which will be about the tanneries - 6-8 pictures.
Here is my 2nd edit of the tanneries section, done as a Flash gallery
so you can see approximately how the slideshow will work:
http://www.web-options.com/RPSTanneries/
I'd welcome your thoughts about the content, sequencing and so on. It
will need to lose some pictures, but I will take part in an RPS
workshop later this month where I will discuss what is strongest -
your views are important to me though (I sound like a call centre!).
My main feeling about this one is that it really needs a stronger
clincher to close the set.
Fire away!
Thanks,
Bob
Bob,
I've visited these galleries several times now, looking at them
different orders, and I've come to the conclusion that because of
this, your bandwidth usage is probably up. You're welcome.
Now, about the gallery/sequence, I just don't get along with your lead
photo as a lead photo. While I understand the idea of the establishing
shot, I don't feel this is a strong enough image for the subject
introduction. I prefer image #13 in the original Tanneries gallery as
the lead-in, both for its wider view and its stronger composition.
The next shot brings us into the action. I would like to see a little
more pop in it, but I also see the charm of the limited range.
Number three is a corker of a shot. Are you trying to establish a
process illustration through this gallery (this happens, then this
happens, then they eat, then they load the donkey), and if so, is this
in its proper place?
The fourth image, I feel, is the weaker of the bunch. I could see
replacing it with the first image in the Tanneries group, which is a
=very= good photo, the boy assuming a pose that is at once
contemporary and almost Renaissance. I am put in mind of Botticelli.
Not anything specific of his, mind you, just in the way the hands are
held, and the head tilted reverently, surrounded by the arch.
Next we have the requisite NatGeo red shirt guys, and they are better
served by the other grouping of them, number 31 in the Tanneries
gallery. I'm a big fan of the "triangle up" composition, and the light
appears a touch better.
No arguments with the next two photos, though putting them together
might detract, as they seem to my eye to be very similar shots. The
second, with the yellow, is the stronger of the two.
The guy in the short doorway should maybe lead to an interior shot,
like #29 in Tanneries.
The last photo in the gallery is a good one, but I do agree something
stronger is necessary. #35 or #36 are good possibles.
Finishing with the ass's ass, while funny, might be a little egregious.
Hope this helps. Feel free to shout me down or ignore me, but whatever
you decide, best of luck in your pursuit.
Doug
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