--- In [email protected], "curtisdeltablues" <curtisdeltablues@...> wrote: <snip> > Busy, busy, Sour Plum. So much rancor to spread but the > numbers of posts are burning so fast. Who else needs > correction, who else needs to be put in their place...and > all around her enemies in collusion, yes enemies who plot > to burn up her posts with things that need correction, so > much scolding to dole out, so many personal flaws to > expose to the innocent world which can't be trusted on its > own to come to the righteous conclusions of the Sour Plum. > Oh and the need for hostile challenges just grows on all > sides between the enemies plotting together, in collusion, > and no one else can see how bad it all is, they must be > warned but that will burn up more posts... > > (I submit this for approval from my Dark Lord who is > training me in the black arts of the "wisecrack".)
I hope he explains to you that this is too labored. You need to work on creating an illusion of insousiance. That actually takes *more* effort and a great deal of practice before it begins to sound plausibly authentic. Your challenge is even greater than Barry's, because you'll want to keep up your Mr. Wonderful side at the same time. Maybe I was too optimistic in telling Barry it wouldn't be long before you were ready to take over.
