> On 12 May 2015, at 14:29, Jan Lehnardt <[email protected]> wrote: > >> >> On 12 May 2015, at 14:22, ermouth <[email protected]> wrote: >> >>> I left my suggestions here: >>> Here are my suggestions: >> >> Collegues, if you have someone who is a) native English speaker, b) has >> skills in writing good copy – could you please ask him/her to review the >> source? > > Good call, let’s see: https://twitter.com/janl/status/598102651222523904 :)
Here’s one: https://gist.github.com/nolanlawson/09cab7798aed9ec9044c I like it :) Best Jan -- > > Best > Jan > -- > >> >> Both @Jan and @Alexander texts have good subtle moments – but they both are >> not enough good for landing, sorry. As well as my texts. >> >> May be @Johs could help? His biz requires strong copy skills, so may be he >> has someone in-staff? >> >>> "Help us" sounds like as we're in catastrophic position (: >> >> I decided 2 cries are acceptable, 3 is too much ) >> >> ermouth > > -- > Professional Support for Apache CouchDB: > http://www.neighbourhood.ie/couchdb-support/ -- Professional Support for Apache CouchDB: http://www.neighbourhood.ie/couchdb-support/
