Bob, All the Fez photos are very accomplished and the series are interesting. I think the problem with the clincher is not having a very close photo. Perhaps some link of portrait would be too cliche, but I yearn for a closer contact. Of course, this is not so easy to get... Thanks for posting these. I always learn by watching what you're doing. Regards, Bob S.
On Wed, Oct 15, 2008 at 2:59 AM, Bob W <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Thanks Christine. I like that shot too, and it was a wrench to edit it > out. But the RPS judges are very strict about repetition, and it is > too similar to the shot which is currently the final one in the series > - I don't think it adds anything to the essay, and it would slightly > disrupt the rhythm, which is a slow closing in from the wide view to > the very close up, then pulling back. > > I have made another slide show with other candidate photos from Fez. I > couldn't find anything else to be a clincher for that series, so I > have started the 2nd section with a wide view of Fez to act as a full > stop. This still needs to lose 7 pictures and be a balanced essay. I > will probably be taken these photos to the workshop in just over a > week. > > Again, I'd be pleased to hear people's comments: > http://www.web-options.com/ARPS/ > > Bob > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On >> Behalf Of Christine Aguila >> Sent: 15 October 2008 07:10 >> To: Pentax-Discuss Mail List >> Subject: Re: Fez - candidate essay for the RPS. Opinions please. >> >> Hi Bob: Boy, your 9 pic essay really is great. The >> sequencing looks good >> to me. You know, I really like this shot >> http://www.web-options.com/Tanneries/content/_A039925_large.ht >> ml, which is >> not in your 2nd edit. Just a thought--really all the pics in >> the 2nd edit >> are great. I have no idea what to suggest for a "stronger > clincher." >> Clearly your RPS workshop will be of more help to you than I >> just was. >> Anyway, I think you're off to a great start. Really enjoyed >> seeing these. >> Cheers, Christine >> >> >> ----- Original Message ----- >> From: "Bob W" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> >> To: "'Pentax-Discuss Mail List'" <[email protected]> >> Sent: Sunday, October 12, 2008 6:01 AM >> Subject: Fez - candidate essay for the RPS. Opinions please. >> >> >> >A couple of days ago I posted a first edit of the tanneries in Fez: >> > http://www.web-options.com/Tanneries/ >> > >> > For the ARPS submission I need an essay of exactly 15 >> pictures. I have >> > decided that I will probably make 2 mini-essays, presented as a >> > slideshow, one of which will be about the tanneries - 6-8 > pictures. >> > >> > Here is my 2nd edit of the tanneries section, done as a >> Flash gallery >> > so you can see approximately how the slideshow will work: >> > http://www.web-options.com/RPSTanneries/ >> > >> > I'd welcome your thoughts about the content, sequencing and >> so on. It >> > will need to lose some pictures, but I will take part in an RPS >> > workshop later this month where I will discuss what is strongest - >> > your views are important to me though (I sound like a call > centre!). >> > >> > My main feeling about this one is that it really needs a stronger >> > clincher to close the set. >> > >> > Fire away! > > > -- > PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > [email protected] > http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly above and follow > the directions. > -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List [email protected] http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly above and follow the directions.
