Yes, to me that change makes the sentence more clear.
Thanks for working on this Lynne!
Nita
On 09/30/08 15:25, Lynne Thompson wrote:
Juanita Heieck wrote:
Lynne,
See a couple of small comments inline.
Nita
On 09/30/08 14:58, Lynne Thompson wrote:
Bart Smaalders wrote:
Lynne Thompson wrote:
o Non-redistributable package
A package that, while perhaps freely available for download, may
not be redistributed or otherwise transfered to a third party
according to the terms of the applicable software license.
o Redistributable package
A software package whose software license permits redistribution
to other parties, which enjoy the same rights as the original
licensee.
- Bart
Your rewrite takes into account most comments so far.
I've made a few minor changes:
o Non-redistributable package
A software package that might be freely available
for download, but might not be redistributed or otherwise
transfered to a third party according to the terms of the
software license.
In Bart's rewrite, I took perhaps to mean "although" rather than "might".
The two "mights" in the sentence somehow don't sound right.
Nita
Thanks Nita! Is this better:
o Non-redistributable package
A software package that could be freely available
for download, but might not be redistributed or otherwise
transfered to a third party according to the terms of the
software license.
Lynne
o Redistributable package
A software package whose software license permits
redistribution to other parties. The other parties
enjoy the same rights as the original licensee.
Thanks,
Lynne
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