Thanks again everyone for all of your input. As there is still some correspondence going around the booklet I'm going to leave it open for comments until 12pm tomorrow. At that point, I plan to close the discussion and prepare a final proof before sending to the printers and uploading to Commons.
Thank you, Stevie On 17 September 2013 10:40, Edward Hands <[email protected]> wrote: > Thank you Martin for your kind words. Harry's edit also makes sense, > especially as I imagine architects may not be the only copyright holders, > even for buildings. > > Tweaking the text of this brochure is a great example of the power of > collaborative editing. > > If you're not familiar with them, Tony1 has devised some great exercises > in redundancy. I have found them quite instructive in the past, and they > could be a useful training tool. As he states, "Redundancy, rather than > poor grammar and spelling, is the biggest source of problems in prose." > > https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tony1/Redundancy_exercises:_removing_fluff_from_your_writing > > best wishes > Edward Hands > Edwardx on WP etc > > Edward's copyediting is a great improvement, and a nice illustration of > how, >95% of the time people say they want more space to write in, what > they actually want is fewer words. Thanks to all who contributed to this > and especially Stevie, of course: I'm sure it will be very useful. > > > On 16 September 2013 17:33, HJ Mitchell <[email protected]> wrote: > >> Edward's suggestions seem sensible to me, though I'd be happy with >> either version. >> >> I might also be inclined to remove "by the architect", especially if >> we're using a sculpture as an example. >> >> Harry Mitchell >> http://enwp.org/User:HJ >> Phone: 024 7698 0977 >> Skype: harry_j_mitchell >> > > _______________________________________________ > Wikimedia UK mailing list > [email protected] > http://mail.wikimedia.org/mailman/listinfo/wikimediauk-l > WMUK: http://uk.wikimedia.org > > -- Stevie Benton Communications Organiser Wikimedia UK +44 (0) 20 7065 0993 / +44 (0) 7803 505 173 @StevieBenton Wikimedia UK is a Company Limited by Guarantee registered in England and Wales, Registered No. 6741827. Registered Charity No.1144513. Registered Office 4th Floor, Development House, 56-64 Leonard Street, London EC2A 4LT. United Kingdom. Wikimedia UK is the UK chapter of a global Wikimedia movement. The Wikimedia projects are run by the Wikimedia Foundation (who operate Wikipedia, amongst other projects). *Wikimedia UK is an independent non-profit charity with no legal control over Wikipedia nor responsibility for its contents.*
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