Often, use of first person makes all of this flow better. "Our analysis of the data revealed significant effects for both main effects..." see pages 69 and 77 for explicit examples of first person usage.
Sent from my iPhone On Mar 20, 2011, at 11:59 AM, "Carol DeVolder" <[email protected]> wrote: > > > Hi Annette, > How about something like, "analysis of the data revealed..." or "examination > of the data (results, etc.)...?" > Carol > > > On Sun, Mar 20, 2011 at 10:53 AM, Annette Taylor <[email protected]> wrote: > I'm grappling with how to phrase some things in results sections especially. > Because data are an inanimate thing they can't really "show" or "demonstrate" > anything. Nor can a study do anything such as "observe" or "define" so what > kind of language do you all use. Is there some boilerplate that works. > > I have a revision to an APA journal that asked me to fix these things...and > I'm struggling with the data especially. Lengthy rewriting of "the study..." > Finally fixed some of those problems. It came at a huge cost to precision and > concise writing. > > Annette > > Sent from my Verizon Wireless Phone > --- > You are currently subscribed to tips as: [email protected]. > To unsubscribe click here: > http://fsulist.frostburg.edu/u?id=177920.a45340211ac7929163a0216244443341&n=T&l=tips&o=9499 > or send a blank email to > leave-9499-177920.a45340211ac7929163a0216244443...@fsulist.frostburg.edu > > > > -- > Carol DeVolder, Ph.D. > Professor and Chair, Department of Psychology > St. Ambrose University > 518 West Locust Street > Davenport, Iowa 52803 > 563-333-6482 > > This e-mail might be confidential, so please don't share it. > > > > --- > > You are currently subscribed to tips as: [email protected]. > > To unsubscribe click here: > http://fsulist.frostburg.edu/u?id=13441.4e79e96ebb5671bdb50111f18f263003&n=T&l=tips&o=9500 > > (It may be necessary to cut and paste the above URL if the line is broken) > > or send a blank email to > leave-9500-13441.4e79e96ebb5671bdb50111f18f263...@fsulist.frostburg.edu --- You are currently subscribed to tips as: [email protected]. To unsubscribe click here: http://fsulist.frostburg.edu/u?id=13090.68da6e6e5325aa33287ff385b70df5d5&n=T&l=tips&o=9501 or send a blank email to leave-9501-13090.68da6e6e5325aa33287ff385b70df...@fsulist.frostburg.edu
