I would have no problem with "system" and I think that it fits in the
Apache guidelines very well.
I am worried that "framework" implies that it does not do anything OOTB
and can only be used to build a working system.
I think that I don't have write access so I hope that someone can take a
few minutes to make the changes.
If the components such as POS are being removed from the core, could
they be called "expansion packages" for the marketing site.
Ron
On 04/09/2014 5:32 PM, Jacques Le Roux wrote:
Le 04/09/2014 21:16, Ron Wheeler a écrit :
The opening description at http://ofbiz.apache.org/ violates Apache's
trademark policy is some very minor ways.
"Apache OFBiz (The Apache Open For Business Project) is an open
source enterprise automation software project licensed under the
Apache License Version 2.0. By open source enterprise automation we
mean: Open Source ERP (Enterprise Resource Planning), Open Source CRM
(Customer RelationShip Management), Open Source E-Business /
E-Commerce, Open Source SCM (Supply Chain Management), Open Source
MRP (Manufacturing Resources Planning), Open Source CMMS/EAM
(Maintenance Management System/Enterprise Asset Management), Open
Source POS (Point Of Sale), and so on.
Apache OFBiz is a foundation and starting point for reliable, secure
and scalable enterprise solutions. Use it out-of-the-box (OOTB) or
customize to suit even your most challenging business needs. With
OFBiz in place, you can get started right away and then grow your
operations as your business grows, without the huge deployment and
maintenance costs of traditional enterprise automation systems.
Apache OFBiz is a project of The Apache Software Foundation."
could be modified to be
"Apache OFBiz, the Apache Open For Business package, is an open
source enterprise automation software product that includes ERP
(Enterprise Resource Planning), CRM (Customer Relationship
Management), E-Business / E-Commerce, SCM (Supply Chain
Management), MRP (Manufacturing Resources Planning), MMS/EAM
(Maintenance Management System/Enterprise Asset Management) and POS
(Point Of Sale) functions.
Apache OFBiz provides a foundation and starting point for reliable,
secure and scalable enterprise solutions. Use it out-of-the-box or
customize it to suit even your most challenging business needs. With
OFBiz, you can get started right away without the huge deployment and
maintenance costs of traditional enterprise automation systems. As
your business grows, extend the functionality to meet your more
sophisticated needs
The Apache OFBiz project is part of The Apache Software Foundation."
This meets the need to protect the Apache OFBiz trademark by defining
it as a "package" rather than a "project". Projects can not be
trademarked (according to Apache) so the definition of OfBiz must
define it as a thing - "software", "package" or "system" are possible.
I'd rather incline to system instead of package and would remove
product, software is enough, no? But I'd even prefer framework than
system...
I also changed CMMS to MMS since the full name is "Maintenance
Management System". Not sure if someone wrote CMMS on purpose and
forgot to add the "C-word" to the definition.
I guess a confusion with CMS. OFBiz has also a (very useful) content
component, but we can't call it a CMS
I removed the repetition of "Open Source" since it applies to all
features and just makes the sentence very hard to read. I would
suggest putting the features as bullets to increase readability but
that is a question of taste and how that would look on the page.
Agreed
I removed the "OOTB" since term is not used later on the page and
just interrupts the flow for no benefit.
+1
CRM - Relationship is one word and the "S" should not be capitalized.
+1
I split the second last sentence to make the sentence easier to read.
Is " extend the functionality" an appropriate way to express the idea
implied in the original sentence.
+1
How does this look? Have I screwe up anything?
No I feel your version is clearer and easier to read.
Are there any other ideas that we should include in the opening
introduction to OFBiz? Typical customers or some guidance about the
target market?
The simpler the better, I'd go with your version
The bullets in the second column repeat some of the functionality
description is this section.
They seem to be selective without a balance between the major
functionality listed in column 1.
I guess this blue block is there for people with TL;DR tendency ;)
BTW since we propose packaged releases, we should soon begin to think
about removing words like POS and such; they will no longer be part of
future releases...
For the POS (and others maybe) we should though explain how it's
possible to check them out from trunk and add them to a released
package...
Jacques
Ron
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