<Don't mock sentimentality, even if it does jerk a few tears.> :-) no, no not at all, Jane! When brother and sister sing that song together in a dim-lit room in Ghatak's "Cloud Capped Star" (Meghe Dhaka Tara) can one resist the tears?
Just curious, Jane. In your writing process, how does the imagery evolve over versions/revisions? I really liked the image of the sharpened branch. For me, those last three lines were really visually evocative, particularly the action of the branches âcutting up the skyâ. I was kind of reminded of Mondrianâs âGrey Treeâ...Particularly the manner in which the mass of broken lines carve up the picture plane in multiple ways producing arrays of form-counter pairs. --- jane bhandari <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Come on, Abhishek. I don't think Farah intended > irony. That was a genuine comment. > > Don't mock sentimentality, even if it does jerk a > few tears. Actually it wasn't meant to be a > tear-jerker, just wanted to convey a depressing > situation. > > Eventually this will become a haiku, when I can > figure out how to cut it down and keep the grey > tone. > > Abhishek Hazra <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > > well, uh...umm, hmm, haw, hmm...is the above an > ironic > utterance on the notion of the 'melodramatic'?? > > > --- Farah wrote: > > > > > Your poem, as always, is very beautiful. It's > > atmosphere conveys such sadness; its like the > tress > > are mourning the loss too.The context has made the > > poem tear-jerking. > > > > Thankyou for sharing it... > > > > Farah > > --- In [email protected], jane bhandari > > wrote: > > > > > > What images of diminishment. > > > > > > I have a winter poem here for you. Similar > feeling > > of sadness and time running out, written while I > was > > waiting for my father to die. > > > > > > > > > > > > THE TREES > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > Here, the trees crowd closer. > > > > > > Even in the dark one feels their presence. > > > > > > In the stillest night they stir, and rustle > > > > > > With the shuffling sound of retreating feet, > > > > > > Mourners murmuring as they depart. > > > > > > > > > > > > After the first gales, leaves lie across the > grass > > > > > > > > Like corpses, whispering death in ghostly > voices, > > > > > > And the wind keens through the empty branches, > > > > > > Sharpening their edges against the bitter sky, > > > > > > Cutting it into a grey shroud for dead summer. > > > > > > > > > Jane Bhandari > > > > > > Farah [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: > > > > > > Time slipped out of my hands > > > > > > > > > > > > Time slipped out of my hand > > > > > > Like sand. > > > > > > Sifting out through an open fist > > > > > > And the little left upon my palm > > > > > > Was also soon gone > > > > > > As if blown away by wind. > > > > > > > > > > > > I watched with disbelieving eyes, > > > > > > This strange, bewildering performance > > > > > > As it passed the frenzied vigor of avalanche > > > > > > Then slowly pulsed down to a mere trickling > line� > > > > > > > > > > > > Farah Shams (1999) > > > > > > > > > > > > Age > > > > > > Time passes, > > > > > > For some slowly. > > > > > > For others_ running. > > > > > > > > > > > > But in the end > > > > > > All are same. > > > > > > The bodies once young > > > > > > As strong young trees > > > > > > With tough branches, > > > > > > Sturdy roots > > > > > > Are reduced to mere skeletons > > > > > > With bare thin limbs > > > > > > And only a trickle of life > > > > > > Flowing in the trunk� > > > > > > > > > > > > And then_ they're lonely. > > > > > > With memories like gusts of wind > > > > > > Blowing, echoing, rumbling > > > > > > Through their bodies. > > > > > > Forcing the stiff branches to creak > > > > > > The hollow, empty body to groan� > > > > > > Till the nearly dead roots > > > > > > Can no longer stand this onslaught > > > > > > And then, they too uproot. > > > > > > > > > > > > Farah Shams (1999) > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > Tree Tops > > > > > > I watched the rising trees soar up, so up > > > > > > Till I had to lie on ground > > > > > > So I wouldn't fall when I looked up > > > > > > And how I wished that I could too > > > > > > Soar up, so up� > > > > > > Until those down below > > > > > > Will have to lie down too. > > > > > > But I was no tree, no plant with roots, > > > > > > A plain mortal I was_ but yes_ I could! > > > > > > I had two arms and legs that walked > > > > > > So I climbed to the top� > > > > > > When atop the highest tree I stood > > > > > > And looked below to my beginnings > > > > > > I realized with sudden clarity > > > > > > The wisdom of me being not a tree_ > > > > > > Then some one too with arms and legs > > > > > > Would one day climb, and stand on me! > > > > > > > > > > > > Farah Shams (2000) > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > -- > > > You are encouraged to post poetry, respond > > critically to the poems circulated and participate > > in discussions. To post, email your message to > > [email protected] OR post online at > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post/ > > > > > > Tell friends to subscribe to ZESTPoets by > sending > > a blank email to > > [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if they > > have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join/ > > > > > > > > > > > > ---theZESTcommunity-------------- > > > > > > [1] ZESTCurrent: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ > > > [2] ZESTEconomics: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ > > > [3] ZESTGlobal: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ > > > [4] ZESTMedia: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ > > > [5] ZESTPoets: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ > > > [6] ZESTCaste: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ > > > [7] ZESTAlternative: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ > > > [8] TalkZEST: > > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ > > > --- > > > > > > > > > > > > --------------------------------- > > > YAHOO! GROUPS LINKS > > > > > > > > > Visit your group "ZESTPoets" on the web. > > > > > > To unsubscribe from this group, send an email > to: > > > [EMAIL PROTECTED] > > > > > > Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to the > Yahoo! > > Terms of Service. > > > > > > > > > --------------------------------- > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > --------------------------------- > > > How much free photo storage do you get? Store > your > > holiday snaps for FREE with Yahoo! Photos. Get > > Yahoo! Photos > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > __________________________________ > Yahoo! FareChase: Search multiple travel sites in > one click. > http://farechase.yahoo.com > > > > -- > You are encouraged to post poetry, respond > critically to the poems circulated and participate > in discussions. To post, email your message to > [email protected] OR post online at > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post/ > > Tell friends to subscribe to ZESTPoets by sending a > blank email to [EMAIL PROTECTED], > OR, if they have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join/ > > > > ---theZESTcommunity-------------- > > [1] ZESTCurrent: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ > [2] ZESTEconomics: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ > [3] ZESTGlobal: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ > [4] ZESTMedia: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ > [5] ZESTPoets: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ > [6] ZESTCaste: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ > [7] ZESTAlternative: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ > [8] TalkZEST: > http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ > --- > Yahoo! Groups Links > > > > > > > > > --------------------------------- > To help you stay safe and secure online, we've > developed the all new Yahoo! Security Centre. __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Tired of spam? Yahoo! Mail has the best spam protection around http://mail.yahoo.com ------------------------ Yahoo! Groups Sponsor --------------------~--> Get fast access to your favorite Yahoo! Groups. Make Yahoo! your home page http://us.click.yahoo.com/dpRU5A/wUILAA/yQLSAA/yqIolB/TM --------------------------------------------------------------------~-> -- You are encouraged to post poetry, respond critically to the poems circulated and participate in discussions. To post, email your message to [email protected] OR post online at http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/post/ Tell friends to subscribe to ZESTPoets by sending a blank email to [EMAIL PROTECTED], OR, if they have a Yahoo! ID, by visiting http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/join/ ---theZESTcommunity-------------- [1] ZESTCurrent: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCurrent/ [2] ZESTEconomics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTEconomics/ [3] ZESTGlobal: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTGlobal/ [4] ZESTMedia: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTMedia/ [5] ZESTPoets: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ [6] ZESTCaste: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTCaste/ [7] ZESTAlternative: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTAlternative/ [8] TalkZEST: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/TalkZEST/ --- Yahoo! Groups Links <*> To visit your group on the web, go to: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ZESTPoets/ <*> To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] <*> Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to: http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/
