> C&C catchup time while I try to muster the enthusiasm to start revising
> the last chapter of 100 Days...
Good luck! We'll all be here, waiting to tear it apart again, whenever
you're done ^_^;...
> > "It was just a practice tag. It wouldn't have hurt you if your pants
> > hadn't caught on fire," Ino defended, a little unnerved by her
> > friend's casual profanity; she'd heard Sakura curse before, just never
> > so freely.
>
> Just so you know, I find the line "It wouldn't have hurt you if your
> pants hadn't caught on fire," inordinately amusing.
I think 'pants on fire!' is an automatic win for _someone_ in most situations...
> > "Riiight- pretty kinky, Ino-chan; I know you like to be in control,
> > but never would've guessed you were into _bondage_..."
>
> Hee.
>
> Anyway, unless my memory fails me that'd be this chapter's new scene.
>
Indeed; it was supposed to be the latter half of the new scene in last
chapter, but didn't make it in time -_-;...
> ...works for me. It's a nice scene with some funny bits, and adds to
> the expanded focus on the Ino/Sakura relationship these revisions have had.
I wish i had more time to focus on that relationship, but now Sakura's
off on some other strange task... [sigh]
>
> The "Kitsune-Tsuki" being a formal kinjutsu is new too, IIRC, though I
> suppose that doesn't change much.
Nope, not really... she'd already been forbidden from fooling with
things she doesn't understand, so this is just the icing on the
cake...
Though i suppose it also makes for a peculiar point of pride.
>
> > "That... instability is one trait that Sabakuno-kun does not seem to
> > share," Yoshinari agreed drolly. While she couldn't see his face,
> > Sakura could swear the bastard was smirking at her. A chuckle escaped
> > Yoshinari's lips when Sakura stuck out her tongue and raspberried him.
>
> Incidentally, I do quite like the "Sabaku no"/"Sabakuno" differentiation
> depending on who's talking/narrating. It's a nice extrapolation of the
> rather unexplored (in canon) cultural difference between the countries.
>
> ...assuming that's intentional, of course. If it isn't, it should be. ;)
It was intentional ^_^. I'm thinking they don't use 'surnames' in the
Hidden Sand as the folks in Konoha understand them... or the use a
more archaic form of designation that has since become surnames
elsewhere in the world, sort of like the relationship between 'Smith'
and 'Son of the Blacksmith'.
> > Bristling, Sakura struggled to keep the scowl from her face. "That was
> > a spur of the moment decision- an accident! And I _succeeded_, sort
> > of. But if you say that the Kaiten won't work, I'll take your word for
> > it." Internally, however, the short pause before his answer had her
> > curiosity doing back flips.
>
> I remember there being one in the original version, but there's no pause
> pointed out before Yoshinori's answer in this version.
Hmm... i thought i fixed that. I'll have to look again...
>
> > "Mom doesn't like the idea of me being a ninja," the young kunoichi
> > explained with an unhappy sigh. "She'd probably be even more upset if
> > she knew where I'm really studying." Sakura glanced over her shoulder
> > at the nondescript facade of the torture and interrogation facility.
>
> Incidentally, I think this paragraph may have been the genesis of the
> train of thought in my mind that ultimately became the plotline with
> Sakura's mother in One Hundred Days...
O_o;...
>
>
> Anyway, that's a wrap with this chapter, on to the next!
>
> --
Yaaay! Sorry it took so long to get back to you on this; been waaaay
too busy, and my backlog of fic-related things to do is starting to
really pile up -_-;...
Thanks for the C&C!
~Eimii
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