Some thoughts on the introduction - I'd change a few things: 1. Presenting Linux for your mobile. => * Presenting new kind of mobile Linux.*
2. Feature rich. Free and open source. First of its kind. => * First of its kind - feature rich, free and open source.* 3. it can power a wide range of devices: from interactive alarm clocks to entertainment systems, from mobile devices to smart TVs. => * it can power a wide range of devices: from interactive alarm clocks to entertainment systems, to mobile devices and smart TVs. * 4. Nemo-power sounds awkward to me. Just write "power". 5. "..." is not very good to use here. Better write "and etc." 6. Let's influence the future of mobile, together! => * Let's influence the future of mobile computing, together!* "mobile" sounds a bit blank. Mobile computing is more to the point. Regards, Hillel. On Mon, Dec 17, 2012 at 9:06 AM, quixote <[email protected]> wrote: > Checked out the update on the pad. Looks very good! > > quixote. > > >
