Some thoughts on the introduction - I'd change a few things:

1. Presenting Linux for your mobile. =>
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Presenting new kind of mobile Linux.*

2. Feature rich. Free and open source. First of its kind. =>
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First of its kind - feature rich, free and open source.*

3. it can power a wide range of devices: from interactive alarm clocks to
entertainment systems, from mobile devices to smart TVs. =>
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it can power a wide range of devices: from interactive alarm clocks to
entertainment systems, to mobile devices and smart TVs.
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4. Nemo-power sounds awkward to me. Just write "power".

5. "..." is not very good to use here. Better write "and etc."

6. Let's influence the future of mobile, together! =>
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Let's influence the future of mobile computing, together!*

"mobile" sounds a bit blank. Mobile computing is more to the point.


Regards,

Hillel.

On Mon, Dec 17, 2012 at 9:06 AM, quixote <[email protected]> wrote:

>  Checked out the update on the pad. Looks very good!
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> quixote.
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